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Cool_China

Jul 16th, 2005 12:23

peaceful, the water...

In the dawn I bike towards the beach. Stray along the beach, and try to undersand the breath of the morning.Bring the eyes to the limit far away, the peaceful water sits there.

未明	Jul 16th, 2005 15:27

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作者: Cool_China

In the dawn I bike towards the beach. Stray along the beach, and try to undersand the breath of the morning.Bring the eyes to the limit far away, the peaceful water sits there.

I bike? or I ride?

understood the breath? why?

bring the eyes? "brought the view" should be better

the water sit there? how? it has butt to sit?

please use meaningful words to fit in your paragraphs.

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