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默认 peaceful, the water...

In the dawn I bike towards the beach. Stray along the beach, and try to undersand the breath of the morning.Bring the eyes to the limit far away, the peaceful water sits there.
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In the dawn I bike towards the beach. Stray along the beach, and try to undersand the breath of the morning.Bring the eyes to the limit far away, the peaceful water sits there.

I bike? or I ride?

understood the breath? why?

bring the eyes? "brought the view" should be better

the water sit there? how? it has butt to sit?

please use meaningful words to fit in your paragraphs.

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