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旧 Mar 6th, 2009, 18:47     #1
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谢谢大师,你的鼓励对一个幼儿园小班的童鞋太重要啦。

不过我认为第三句应该改改,感觉上“旅者”较之“旅人”在整体的音调上要好,或还有其它地方有何讲究也请大师指点。

还有,我好高兴你们称我为兄弟。
画兄对诗的领悟力很敏锐啊。第三句最后一个字,是要用仄声(三、四声)。

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看疯狂老兄打牌,之麻将篇:

一筒一万一幺鸡
一中一发一白皮
一吃一碰一回手
一杠一听,自摸。。。。滴!

这么烂的牌都能自摸
建议放到麻将帖的开头,作为开篇诗.
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“一”在我们眼里是一个数字概念,然而若把“一”恰当地运用到诗文中,会产生很美的艺术效果。清代女诗人何佩玉写过一首“一”字诗,诗中写到:“一花一柳一鱼矶,一抹斜阳一鸟飞,一山一水中一寺,一林黄叶一僧归。”一连串地10个“一”字,描绘出了一幅山林晚景画。现代诗人流沙河也曾作过一首以“以”字贯穿全篇的《重...
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学写一段,

《夜行船》
一舟一橹一帆轻
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疯狂老师写的真好,使我一下就明白过来,非常感谢。如果偶尔给我们讲解一下有关诗词创作的基本常识就好啦。
火山兄的话:
再说一下这几首诗的格律。感觉搜底和白云的诗还是符合律诗要求的,就是简单地根据每句“一三五不论,二四六分明”的原则,他们俩的诗没有出现“失对”,“失粘”的硬伤。不过,我说过,不严格要求格律,这样,各位不注意也就情有可原了。把律诗的平仄要求贴在这里。

七 律 第 一 式
平平仄仄仄平平 仄仄平平仄仄平 仄仄平平平仄仄 平平仄仄仄平平
平平仄仄平平仄 仄仄平平仄仄平 仄仄平平平仄仄 平平仄仄仄平平
七 律 第 二 式
仄仄平平仄仄平 平平仄仄仄平平 平平仄仄平平仄 仄仄平平仄仄平
平平仄仄平平仄 仄仄平平仄仄平 仄仄平平平仄仄 平平仄仄仄平平
七 律 第 三 式
平平仄仄平平仄 仄仄平平仄仄平 仄仄平平平仄仄 平平仄仄仄平平
平平仄仄平平仄 仄仄平平仄仄平 仄仄平平平仄仄 平平仄仄仄平平
七 律 第 四 式
仄仄平平平仄仄 平平仄仄仄平平 平平仄仄平平仄 仄仄平平仄仄平
仄仄平平平仄仄 平平仄仄仄平平 平平仄仄平平仄 仄仄平平仄仄平

以后如果再做律诗就应该注意一二。

上面的是我第二次施展了乾坤大挪移从春雪社搬来的.

我们现在作的一字诗,应该归入七绝,参照每种格式的前四句即可.
平(一二声)
仄(三四声)
按照现代读音.
第三句一般不要求押韵.第一句有时要押韵,有时不押韵.大家开始写的时候,不用顾及那么多,力求先畅快地表达意境,然后再斟酌字词格律.


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不公平,就没有我的诗评?
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观老师出的不是繁体字吧?


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原谅我8,疯狂老师,我怎么总是这么粗心。。。你们了解我后就知道啦。唉,这次都是因为草原兄说徐老的那帖子,总牢牢把我吸着要看,你的离他的帖子稍远一些,我就居然没回,我这里给老师鞠躬8。

其实看你的诗时,我印象很深刻,感觉就是清明时节雾霭中瑟瑟清冷的风,这首诗空灵...
读了画兄的点评,我真得迷茫了.这么好的诗真的是我写的吗?
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已将诸位大作加添到博客里了,请大家有时间进去座座。
http://chunxue2009.blog.sohu.com/111787195.html
竹兄优质高效,看过了,很满意.
同时,也诚心地邀请诸位参与并加入,同上贼船.
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看到这个题目想起徐志摩的那首《沪杭车中》,和童话MM写的不能说是臭味相投,也算是心有灵犀,如果志摩再世看到童话的诗估计也会以头抢地,郁闷而死,既生摩,何生画?童话不写诗,实在是怕我羞愧而死呀。有句名言说得好:再伟大的画家,终归还是一名慈善家。

徐志摩 -- 沪杭车中

   匆匆匆!催催...
与志摩的这首诗相比,我们的一字诗更具海外特色,那就是没有数量词.
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徐志摩太美啦,看到草原兄引用的这一首后的感触,看来要多找来欣赏了。

诗词的魅力,要有足够的经历才能体会更深啊。
还需要读者自己去做大量的补充.不论是想象,情感,景色......
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我每次都是看到你写的好,触动了我内心深处的一点,就写写。真的很高兴遇到你,遇到大家。刚来的时候就感觉到了荒岛,没人说人话,面试时都听不懂人家问什么,时不时想起那句名言“我是中国人,何必学外文。”嘿嘿,除了家财万贯,咱移民哪有容易的呀,能一步步走过来都不容易。
这是我当时的一段梦中呓语。

举家迁至加国,转眼已近四载。连我自己都要佩服自己当初的勇气,不过我清楚地知道,要想有所得就必须不怕有所失。学上过了,工也打过了,所谓的专业工作也解决了。才恍然发现,与当初的设想既有相似之处,同时又不尽相同。值得欣慰的是自己仿佛真的长大了。

我搞不清楚自己到底想要什么,总之,得到的并非我所想要的,至少不是全部。人是很怪的动物,不是吃好穿好甚至玩好就可以打发的。不过,也许正是由于整个人类的永不知足,才推动了科学技术及人类文明的发展。而这里的生活于我,只是另外一种人生的经历。而我想人生的真谛,恐怕也就在于增加人生的阅历了。

有时,即便你失去了很多,也不会影响你的所得。人生的路就好比是一个接着一个的岔路口,错过了,就会永远错过,再不会有重新回头走过的机会。只好大胆的朝前走,走到天尽头。我有时想,或许正是因为有了这些错过的选择机会,才会让人产生一种美丽的错觉,以为是自己选择了你的人生。

坦荡的大路也好,崎岖的小路也罢,只有坦然地去走过,只要大方向不错,就不必太认真,也不能太计较。原本没有对与错,只是人心使然。一步三回头就太过频繁了点儿。三村九里过后,再回头,望来路。

我就像一位参禅多年而未能开悟的学僧,心中一直存着对禅道神秘的向往和有朝一日顿悟时的企盼。其实等到真的到了那一刻,感到索然无味也未可知。

色即是空,空即是色。世间万事万物皆离不开因缘。种种因缘又构成了世间万事万物。我们人在江湖,也只好随缘。随缘好,随缘了,随缘烦恼少。
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好!


嗯嗯, 偶也瞎着呢.



照葫芦画瓢儿, 凑热闹瞎玩哈. 观<画皮> 而感.

<画心>

一笔一画一痴心
一仙一心一尘缘
一颦一笑一哀恨
一帘幽梦一帘情

<缘>

一草一木一春天
一沙一尘一须臾
一花一叶一生恋...

第二首有些禅意呀!
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青梦

一头枕着东岳

一脚担在西峰

一榻横亘南海

一履堆放北疆
楚竹兄这青梦有点《山海经》的神韵啊!
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香草诗兄,第二首我很喜欢,让我读了一遍又一遍
这几首一字诗都很有意境,征求一下作者的意见,连着老兄青梦,,加入博客吧。
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才看到这里~
不晚,赶紧上一首呀。
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一有一空有本空
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