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旧 Dec 31st, 2008, 22:44     #1
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默认 和calgaryjet

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诗友们有兴趣吗?去年感谢大家捧场,看到很多高人的作品。新的一年,新的开始。
我先献个丑,起个头,

新年
窗外炮竹声声响,
门上福字倒头挂。
小儿举指数新岁,
试玩新嫁鸳鸯配。

......。
2008阳历年底
——和calgaryjet《新年》

不闻鞭炮声声起,
倒挂福字客不识。
同是年末辞旧岁,
不似当年过除夕。

心似白云常自在
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旧 Dec 31st, 2008, 22:49     #2
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默认 和闲人

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缘梦逐红日
涤尘潜碧溪
卷舒归远鹤
苍狗任无极


溜狗所得

——和闲人《云》

晨起映红日,
晚归染夕阳。
浓卷润万物,
淡舒作天祥。
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旧 Dec 31st, 2008, 22:54     #3
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默认 和车夫

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邻居有条狗
每天都要走
去年008
今年009
打油诗
——和车夫《邻居有条狗》

邻家有条狗,
时而吼一吼。
今年叫0-8,
明年叫0-9。
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旧 Dec 31st, 2008, 23:02     #4
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默认 和calgaryjet《恶狗三分欺生人》

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明年不是狗年吧,怎么大家跟狗干上了?
好吧,我也来凑凑然热闹。

恶狗三分欺生人,
好犬七分护主人。
不管好恶怎区分,
统统火锅里理论。
听来的打油诗(略改)
——和calgaryjet《恶狗三分欺生人》

好歹不分一条狗,
守在主人大门口。
让它咬谁就咬谁,
叫咬几口咬几口。

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旧 Dec 31st, 2008, 23:18     #5
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默认 同意

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字样上多斟酌,意思有了。
同意
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旧 Jan 1st, 2009, 16:28     #6
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默认 和草原之夜《关于农耕生活》

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关于农耕生活:

一丛竹,半亩田,秧苗三两插中间,只为图清闲
秋风起,稻花香,水缸暂且做粮仓,一醉又何妨
也说农耕生活
——和草原之夜《关于农耕生活》

山青青,草青青,山间闲草随意生。凡人自多情。
水悠悠,苗悠悠,水边春苗自然秋。俗子空忧愁。

(2009年1月1日作于加拿大卡尔加里市)
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旧 Jan 2nd, 2009, 02:12     #7
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默认 和卡城小狼《风声起》

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风声起,雪花急,今春不如去春吉,经济不景气。
商家愁,店家急,钱紧还愁袋无米,更恐无商机。
和卡城小狼《风声起》

风声起,雪花急,处处无家处处居,喜怒凭心绪。
卖家滞,买家稀,春春不似春春至,哀乐在自己。
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旧 Jan 2nd, 2009, 22:46     #8
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默认 和楚竹《窗外飞雪霓裳舞》

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窗外飞雪霓裳舞
小屋泥炉香屑飞
疾手写诗平平仄
笑曰何觅仄仄平
雪天品茶
——和楚竹《窗外飞雪霓裳舞》

窗外雪天暮已垂,
屋暖香茗飘心扉。
闲来顺手平仄句,
难写落雪飞与谁。

(2009年1月2日作于加拿大卡尔加里市)
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旧 Jan 2nd, 2009, 22:51     #9
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默认 对不起看走眼了

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我那是照着唐诗整的...郁闷.
对不起,我过节喝水喝大了,看走眼了,以为您是继承发扬了老张的诗法。还请车夫海涵。
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旧 Jan 3rd, 2009, 12:24     #10
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默认 好主意

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雪天品茶
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窗外雪天暮已垂,
屋暖香茗飘心扉。
闲来顺手平仄句,
难写落雪飞与谁。


看来找到同道了,何时赏雪问茶呀?
赏雪问茶,好主意。你不是茶坊托吧?嘿嘿......有人组织吗?
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旧 Jan 10th, 2009, 20:13     #11
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默认 和楚竹《楚竹悠然》

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楚竹悠然

楚山有五君
竹梅兰菊剑
悠哉论天地
然然伴霞云
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几天不在家,竟然满屏新篇。今天高兴,俺也和一首凑数:

和楚竹《楚竹悠然》

楚家有佳丽,
竹林遮欢聚。
悠悠是痴情,
然然见心志。
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默认 和楚竹《酒仙赞》

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酒仙赞

吾乃蓬莱第九仙
常醉江边揽月眠
不羡凌霄瑶池宴
愿醉卡城九百年
...
和楚竹《酒仙赞》

几度蓬莱不见仙,
空对月眠醉江边。
年少当醉未曾醉,
却任不惑醉百年。
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旧 Jan 10th, 2009, 22:05     #13
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默认 和volcano《楚竹悠然》

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俺也来个"楚竹悠然”

楚地有奇才,
竹立山石间。
悠悠摆仙姿,
然然拥风眠。
和volcano《楚竹悠然》

楚间有奇女,
竹笔显才智。
悠悠吐新曲,
然然展仙姿。
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旧 Jan 10th, 2009, 22:14     #14
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默认 卡城小狼此诗甚佳

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和您老一首

楚竹悠然

楚水源天山,
竹立两岸边。
悠悠奔东海,
然然过百川。
此诗甚佳,构思深远,气势磅礴。本人无以为和,自愧不如。赞!

仅探讨第二句。似觉不甚妥当,但又不知如何改。或许换成“竹林绿两岸”会略显工整些,但心里没谱。

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旧 Jan 10th, 2009, 22:33     #15
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默认 和楚竹《楚竹悠然》

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volcano,卡城小狼,俩位写得太有意境了,我实在忍不住再接一首。大家还有其它雅致的题目吗?请踊跃提供。

楚竹悠然

楚山寻隐仙
竹篱半山间
悠哉饮风月
然然暗香传
和楚竹《楚竹悠然》

楚峰隐老仙,
竹影掩洞前。
悠哉听风月,
然也过非凡。
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旧 Jan 10th, 2009, 23:19     #16
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默认 卡城小狼优质高产

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再和

楚竹悠然

楚人舟上立,
竹槁浪中击。
悠悠荡湘江,
然然画中栖。
卡城小狼的诗作是优质高产。欣赏。

猜是把“篙”误打成“槁”了。用拼音输入的吧?

另把“湘江”换成“江水”上扬一下如何?建议而已。
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默认 谢谢指教

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另外,俺已经把“楚竹悠然”全部存起来,共有十三首之多,很好,俺放在俺的空间里了,各位介意吗?白云,建议将“聚”“志”改一字,有点不押韵。
谢谢指教。“聚”和“志”只能算“勉强韵”,那就改了吧!我把“心志”改成“情趣”如何?
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默认 谢谢楚竹对我的谬奖

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真想不到,两天不见坛中好诗迭出、妙趣横生,高兴的很。

诗品如人品,看诗如睹人。

白云——洒脱俊朗

卡城小狼——豪放不羁

草原之夜——爽朗不拘

VOLCANO——清新淡雅
谢谢楚竹对我的谬奖。“近朱者赤,近墨者黑。”与你们这些高雅之人对诗和词,自然也添了几分洒脱。
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旧 Jan 12th, 2009, 22:51     #19
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默认 响应“小狼在草原上跑,楚竹在白云下摇”

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哈哈,各位高才,俺领教了,俺想到一个题目,以各位的网名为第一字写八句,小狼草原楚竹白云,排名不分先后,俺只是想到,小狼在草原上跑,楚竹在白云下摇,意境还行吧?
俺先来,

小忆当年边塞地,
狼烟四起百姓慄。
草上只见战马飞,
原下不闻鸡犬啼。
楚楚女儿哀声起,
竹林深处无君迹。
白日尽欢须纵酒,
云锦张开无处觅。...
响应“小狼在草原上跑,楚竹在白云下摇”,今草一绝,凑数。其实,无论是藏头诗还是嵌字诗都不好写。难写的主要原因是用字限制了发挥,很容易出现牵强附会、以辞害意。既要和韵应景又要不露拼接的痕迹,既要表现网友畅怀的感受又要符合限定的“小狼在草原上跑,楚竹在白云下摇”的意境。我琢磨了半天,只写了四句,勉强算作一首七绝吧:

落基山下白云飞,
草原深处小狼肥。
自从楚竹生此地,
诗人有家不愿回。
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旧 Jan 15th, 2009, 22:32     #20
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默认 这首诗肯定不是你今天作的

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今天,学着填了一首词(鹧鸪天),平仄韵押得不是很准。请大家点评。

鹧鸪天

我乃天界司酒郎,天帝无耐束我狂。
曾将舒云作宣纸,九天揽月领华章。
诗万首,酒千觞,不曾正眼看封王
琼楼玉宇不屑去,且把金樽对斜阳
其豪放气势之磅礴出乎我的想象。这首词肯定不是你今天临时作的。似乎有春暖花开时壮士醉一把就出征的意思。
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