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旧 May 15th, 2006, 19:08     #1
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默认 我笑痴心多俗媚,痴心笑我意难平

2005年自选集

去年比较懒,写得不多,稍微选了选,得了这么一集。此外还写了几首比较香艳的词,可以到我的自留地去刨:http://www.home38.com/yili


海归
曾聆花语信持缘,一苇西来年复年。
掌影河山常入梦,鎏光岁月望成烟。
夷齐肯爱金银岛,范伯何担道义肩。
满座渭城东去客,红场不是旧时天。

寒山之闻鼓三章
(一)
神坛气象染黄绫,十万叶鸣鼓吼声。
讵问寒山多俗事,新歌老调竞升平。
(二)
寒山一别湿红绫,鼓上犹萦墨迹声。
我笑痴心多俗媚,痴心笑我意难平。
(三)
掠影蟾光曼舞绫,寒山鼓寂静无声。
江湖可度缘僧俗,尘外何须问太平。

网客
域外乘云掠海天,苍茫碧玉化樽前。
诸君绮色多沉醉,各领风骚三百篇。
我看长川倾似瀑,谁将怒海渡如闲。
网中自有潮头客,更把红旗立浪巅。

题荷叶照
依稀冷月半沉塘,云影徘徊残叶光。
夜静鸣蛙催梦熟,晶莹一滴蓦荷香。

硌矶山居,和韵寒山诸友
黑白争疏发,年轮枉自匆。山空人迹渺,云外岭无穷。
城傍千山雪,时侵苦楝风。人间春已老,仍不见桃红。

黑客的世界
幻象时空发未来,迷踪黑客破关开。银河澹澹漂神矢,意念迢迢息氛埃。
以我精魂折天镜,将谁罡气守灵台。星云亿万原来小,大自在心漫九垓。

普洱茶 答无酒居士
醇香伴无酒,普洱杂新陈。欲访苍山翠,何需几载春?

钗头凤 凤头钗
鸡声唤,光流转,步摇身称明珰幻。痴心结,花开绝,散香如舞,落梅如雪,别,别,别。
云丝漫,钗钏颤,一枝黄玉留春半。青梅冽,红唇啜,凤仪如昔,燕燕如颉,珏,珏,珏。

减字木兰花 选一
云底草长,湖色幽蓝于梦想。 午后风凉,数不清冲天麦芒。
人同花树,幻化时间之静寤。 云气青寒,直入空蒙谁与看。
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旧 May 15th, 2006, 19:55     #2
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您这叫懒啊?这叫不多啊?带我老人家好好看看您的小散文。
呵呵,和两天发一次骚比较起来, 真的比较懒,今年好像更少,除了应景时不得不写几句,根本不动笔了。我都怀疑自己是不是江郎才尽了,。。。
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旧 May 16th, 2006, 01:48     #3
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这两天,我这自留地长了点小虫虫, 现在终于摘掉了

应该畅通了哈
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旧 May 16th, 2006, 02:58     #4
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哈哈,学习了一下,工整是工整,但怎么说呐,就拿下棋来说吧,地是占了,但让人看了觉得势不大,有点投机.

呵呵,瞧您说的,一会势,一会地,都让一人占全了,别人还下不下棋呢

这年头能整整齐齐码上, 每行五字或七字,不多不少正好就很不容易了,你还要怎的?
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旧 May 16th, 2006, 18:19     #5
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老中也开始牵MM的手了,太好了,大家都牵一牵.
老中的手就没停过,没见他最近一直在义妹那里上下其手吗
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旧 May 17th, 2006, 02:27     #6
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LZ好棒哟,能写这么香艳的打油诗.这是别的网友先引了,我就说两句,这里是不是有版权的事.

搞不懂,这打油诗怎么和古诗词放在了一起,别告我这是五言律诗哟,无论仄起还是平起都读不顺,别得也看出了点问题,就不一一详述了.

这也能置精呀?哎,我就是不会写,要不也能出个置精的帖,那样好处多多是吧...
咖啡提的问题很好,我也可以作一点点普及。

世上雷锋好,坛中杂事喧。 红旗依旧在,春梦了无痕。脾气年年老,版砖日日抡。棋人走大水,安得养溟鲲。

这是从风格来说显然是首打油诗,但是却是严格的五律诗。

我的诗都是押平水韵, 这首是押十三元, 韵是没有错的。 根据王力先生的诗词格律十讲一书, 这首五律是按照仄起仄收:

五律类型三

⊙仄⊙平仄
平平⊙仄平(韵)
⊙平⊙仄仄
⊙仄仄平平(韵)
⊙仄⊙平仄
平平⊙仄平(韵)
⊙平⊙仄仄
⊙仄仄平平(韵)

杜甫

春望

国破山河在,
城春草木深。
感时花溅泪,
恨别鸟惊心。
烽火连三月,
家书抵万金。
白头搔更短,
浑欲不胜簪。

两相比较无一字出律,中间两联应该对仗, 红旗对春梦,脾气对版砖应该没问题。技术上到此为止。

至于境界,诗味,意韵啊,呵呵,您高人,我就不和您争了。
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哼哼,自己去对,还没错,看你脸大的.
不好意思哈,咱好事做到底,哪错了, 请指出来嘛

世上雷锋好,坛中杂事喧。 红旗依旧在,春梦了无痕。脾气年年老,版砖日日抡。棋人走大水,安得养溟鲲。
⊙仄⊙平仄,平平⊙仄平(韵),⊙平⊙仄仄,⊙仄仄平平(韵),⊙仄⊙平仄,平平⊙仄平(韵),⊙平⊙仄仄,⊙仄仄平平(韵)

⊙表示可平可仄,
十三元——元原源园猿辕坦烦繁蕃樊翻萱冤言轩藩魂浑温孙门尊存蹲敦墩暾屯豚村盆奔论(动词)坤昏婚阍根恩吞沅媛援爰幡番反埙鸳宛掀昆琨扪荪髡跟垠蕴犍袁怨蜿溷昆炖饨臀喷纯
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旧 May 17th, 2006, 12:16     #8
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野草这故事好像很经典啊

俺这心理向来都是狠阴暗地, 参见俺的签名档。 恨人有,气人无,但原则上不针对某个特定的个人,飞龙兄包含则个。(你这宝号总让我想起和武二郎在蜈蚣岭上斗个难分高下的飞天蜈蚣,得罪,呵呵)
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我也打不出,是尻过来的。 可以到我的自留地里去看,具体地址是:

http://www.home38.com/yili/ref/baijia/gelv.htm
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旧 May 17th, 2006, 20:33     #10
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要是有机会见着的话,想就这个求您个字。
你太客气了,咱乡里乡亲的,见面机会相信会有很多。
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